Would you be interested in reading a book that started off like this?

I enjoyed your very expressionative and creative delivery in your "preview". I would read this book, without question. But the only thing I've found from this preview I disliked was can you keep a reader hooked through the entire story? Is it exciting? One more thing, you should end the preview with a bit more mystery and excitement. However as a rough it was quite an enjoyable story from the preview that I took. Even if people don't respond to this, I would recommend going ahead and creating a typed up manuscript and begin to start preparing to publish it. Because regardless of what anybody says on here, I would go for it and attempt to publish it. I wish you the best of luck with your book and if it takes off I would be delighted to know ;-)